Do you like my Poem A leap of love?

She made a promise to her mother

To learn to dance just like no other

But she could feel it in her vision

To never make one bad decision

You see her mom had done a move so daring

And found the floor was not so sparing

And now she’s slightly paralyzed

Her dream is done unrealized

Well as time went by a new contest

Her daughter vowed to be the best

She felt her mother watching her

Praying old events will not occur

But she glided to that very move

And did the leap and found her groove

Then like Fred Astaire did with a broom

She danced the floor and swept that room

Then in her ears there came a roar

The votes were in a perfect score

And to all the others who had tried

With that leap of love they were denied

But a vision seen then was not kept

Her mom forgave her as they wept

They felt their tears, they shared their cries

Her mom had won now through her eyes

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  • 5 years ago

    Its a really sweet poem, though I have to say I don't like the whole 'living through your daughter' thing, but that's only because I have bad experiences with that. If you want to improve it, try using words that don't necessarily rhyme. Rhyme isn't essential in poems, and not using it can sometimes be more effective. Otherwise this is very well written, and really gives you a sense of pride in the daughter. Well done.

  • 5 years ago

    I try to live out my dreams through my Daughters they just tell me to 'Get Lost ; ... 'What a lovely rhyming poet you are ..I really enjoyed reading that one thanks for posting :)

  • 5 years ago

    no

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