Duke asked in Arts & HumanitiesPoetry · 8 years ago

what is another way to write this poem?

there's a field of flowers

and and they smell like you

and i go walking through and they are

So soft and so tragic

like a slaughterhouse. where there is

No shadows and No reflections

you know I'd love to pick one for my lapel

but you know there are too many insects watching

I'm afraid they'd tell on me

And then I'd say to you we could take to the highway

I would drive on to the end with you

and to the liquor store or two

I'd end my days with you in a hail of bullets

there's an explosion and the black rain falls

Hold my hands

Because I think

Our time has come

I signed a sacred pact,

to take you to the other side,

A place you've never been. where

The past is not the future, life does not exist.

into the shadows, the bliss of wickedness.

I'll leave you barely breathing,

little disinterest.

You'll be my dark angel, my skeleton with skin.

Just in case the fates are kind and you come back someday

I don't want to live without you emily

because You Took my lonely life

With a carving knife,

To die beside my haunted dream.

You wear your ruins well

Please run away with me to hell.

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    Across from my house there's a field of flowers

    and each time I walk through them I am reminded of you

    the fragrance, like I remember when you first awake each dawn

    and i go walking through,

    their softness and so tragically,

    like a slaughterhouse, where there are

    No shadows and No reflections

    you know I'd love to pick one for my lapel

    but you know there are too many insects watching

    I'm afraid they'd inform on me

    And then I'd say to you we could take to the highway

    I would drive on to the end with you

    and to the liquor store we'd run

    I'd end my days with you in a hail of bullets

    in a glorious explosion of black falling rain.

    Hold my hands

    Because I think

    Our time has come.

    I signed a sacred pact,

    to take you to the other side,

    A place you've never been. where

    The past is not the future, life does not exist.

    Into the shadows, the bliss of wickedness.

    I'll leave you barely breathing,

    Showing little interest.

    You'll be my dark angel, my skeleton with skin.

    But in case the fates are kind and you come back someday

    I don't want to live without you emily

    Just because You Took my lonely life

    With a carving knife,

    To die beside my haunted dream.

    I see you wear your ruins well

    Come, please run away with me to hell.

    How's that?

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