A lesson from my sister?

When we were so young, and very carefree

We shared all our thoughts, on what we might be

We played make believe with all of our toys

We all had some fun, we were just all young boys

We all played outdoors, we liked the outside

We played hide and seek, be the best one to hide

We played with our bats, until it was fall

Then we traded that game, now its football

Then there was sis, who had a dollhouse

On one rainy day, we stuck in a mouse

We all were so wrong, my sis had no fright

She put her dukes up, she wanted to fight

I hid my forehead, with my baseball cap liner

So no one would know, that she gave me a shiner

Looks are deceiving, I’ve heard them say

It took on more meaning, on that dreary day

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago
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    That's a hell of a lesson to learn. It's written well.

    Good work.

  • 1 decade ago

    Wow this is so good and such a wonderful poem which we all can relate too one way or another.I was just thinking 3 days ago about being a kid in the spring time playing all just hanging with friends and chilling..Nice write my friend.

  • 1 decade ago

    i like it a lot. well done. suggest in the first stanza that you only use we in the first line. start the next three lines with shared, played and all

    do othe same with the second stanza, keep the first line as is. start the second line with played, third line, check your thesaurus for another word for played, fourth line with we traded

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    AHHHH ITS CUUUUUTTTEEE

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