People of P&S: How do you like my new poem called "Candles"? (Read/review please)?

Candles Shiny Wax cylinder Sleeked With white viscosity The little globules Hardened in place From its last Fiery awakening Still remain At various lengths It's flickering flame Like a sliver Of red hot air Makes it all Beautiful And signifies The passing of time But even that Cannot... show more Candles

Shiny Wax cylinder
Sleeked
With white viscosity
The little globules
Hardened in place
From its last
Fiery awakening
Still remain
At various lengths

It's flickering flame
Like a sliver
Of red hot air
Makes it all
Beautiful
And signifies
The passing of time

But even that
Cannot compare
To the giant
Bundle of sticks
Outdoors

Trees
Arch in many ways
And go off
In all directions
Stretching towards
The blue-white
Night sky

The human eye
Cannot keep up
With intricacies
Of nature
The tree knows
And uses that
To its advantage

Therefore
When nobody watches
The tree
Directs its branches
Towards that
Vast expanse

And
At the very tips
Of wood
Marked
With flower buds
Fire appears
The gray clouds
Become
Wispy smoke strands
Update: Aww...Velvet I love you too. :)
Update 2: Thanks dear Kat. :)
Update 3: Really Big Dog? Thanks a lot. :)
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