My poem, My cheating wifes friend, comments?

A friend came to me so full of sorrow

He said he's leaving come tomorrow

His wife was seeing our friends brother

And before him, there was another

She's played it like it was a game

But deep inside, she hides her shame

She really loves him like no other

But others crave her, as a lover

I'm sure their marriage I can save

If I can reach her, and she behave

And so before, this day ends

I'll talk to her, they'll make amends

She now wants to give him heart and soul

But she sealed her fate, she dug her hole

If you lead this life, feel no surprise

A tempted life, can cause demise

And in the end they parted ways

He found a lover, through those days

And now that the tables turned

She cries at night, a lesson learned

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  • 1 decade ago
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    WOW!!!! this is a very powerful poem, sad but meaningful. i really like it.

    Source(s): great job.
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    Lv 5
    1 decade ago

    Good!

    I prefer though the poems without rhymes. They are much more free, you aren't constraint by rhyming them. You can concentrate only on the subject/feelings you want to share. But your stanzas are good. And for these ones you'd worked some, I think.

    As about:

    "She now wants to give him heart and soul ....." - sorry, but

    there is NO such thing !!!

    There are no such things as Honest Liars !!!

    And life is just One ..... unfortunately.

    "But others crave her, as a lover" Wow, good for you, but don't think you'll be more lucky than her husband; you'll be the next to be lied - ha, ha, ha (sorry4u)

    or

    "I'm sure their marriage I can save

    If I can reach her,"

    Don't bother, trust me. Any they can do is only their job.

    "When you jump into the trough, pigs shall eat You"

  • Yeah!!! Thats a good poem it shows that you have put effort into this and all your heart n soul yea i like that poem sounds wicked!!

  • 1 decade ago

    Good job

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  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Wow, I like it alot.

    I was very close to someone in the exact situation.

    Very nice work:)

  • 1 decade ago

    Ouch that hurts! Karma hits me...lesson learnt!

  • 1 decade ago

    Wow, this is a very meaningful poem. Great work!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Very good, very good indeed. And for anyone who has been hurt by this same topic, my sympathies

  • 1 decade ago

    i really like this good job

  • 1 decade ago

    Great work, I love it!

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