My poem about My wifes daily shower, is it entertaining?

When my wife does take her daily shower

It always takes her near an hour

I wonder what she does in there

Does it take that long to wash her hair

She says she needs to wash each spot

Cause she will stink, if she does not

I think she needs a shower tutor

I’ll look for one on the computer

I just need one to talk her through it

Men just want to help her do it

I guess that was a bad idea

I don’t need all those weirdo’s here

One morning my son had to go

I told him wait, but he said no

He went upstairs and flushed the jon

My wife yelled yikes, what’s going on

Now in my room my dog is howling

And all in sync with my cat meowing

So theres the thing that bothers me

Is that she can’t sing like on TV

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  • Dondi
    Lv 7
    1 decade ago
    Best Answer

    I liked it, light hearted humor makes really good poetry. I am beginning to expect good things from you.

    Dondi

  • 1 decade ago

    Recommendations:

    1. Change the first line, first stanza to read:

    "When my wife is in her shower," That brings balance.

    2. Work on your punctuation and use of quoted dialogue. That appears to be your weakness.

    3. Cause in the second stanza should appear as 'Cause. You intentionally omitted the -be in because.

    4. Jon, as in toilet, is usually spelled as john.

    5. Wierdo's, as written, indicates the possessive. Simply make the word plural, i.e., wierdos.

    Otherwise, cleverly written.

    Source(s): Writer among other things.
  • 1 decade ago

    Indeed it is entertaining! Just hope your wife is just as amused though. Otherwise good luck on the couch.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Well, it would be nice if you closed it with your wife singing and that got the dog an cat singing, maybe...in the shower...your wife, I mean.

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  • 1 decade ago

    LOL LOL !!! It's super. It made me laugh. Yes, it is indeed very entertaining. I love 'I think she needs a shower tutor- !

    You are very funny and a talented poet.

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    Ahahah! I love it. It is very entertaining. Does your wife know about your poem?

  • 1 decade ago

    Hahaha that was funny, very entertaining!

  • Anonymous
    1 decade ago

    It kept me entertained.

  • Woosie
    Lv 4
    1 decade ago

    Very entertaining, well done!

  • 1 decade ago

    I liked it. cute and clever.

    Source(s): me
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